Friday, January 21, 2011

Friday 55

If  you write a story in 55 words, kindly slip over and let the G-Man know you played his game.



The anticipation was torturous.   
The ebb and flow kept building to a tingling crescendo,
then…

….nothing.

Just when he thought it had passed,
the urge would begin cycling again. 

Slow. 
Deliberate. 
Teasing.

Will this never end? Jim wondered. 
I can’t take much more of this climax to nowhere.

“Just sneeze already!” he yelled in frustration.

14 comments:

steven said...

ha!! that was going so many different places. superb!!! steven

mapstew said...

What a dirty mind I have!
Bless you! :¬)

xxx

Brian Miller said...

ugh. i hate to sneeze...so the build up just kills me...

Monkey Man said...

THAT was FANtastic. I love surprise endings. You really nailed this one.

Larry said...

hhmmmm yes I remember them very well but now that I'm older I don't have them as often really no pun intended.
You'll find my Friday Fifty five
The Alley

Akelamalu said...

Oooh I was getting all hot and bothered reading that and it was just a sneeze! LOL

Eric 'Bubba' Alder said...

Oh man, been there done that!
(Irritating!)

Funny 55, Hope!

Jannie Funster said...

ha! With Texas in full cedar pollen allergy swing, boy can I relate to this! I sneezed 10 times today before even getting out of bed.

Fun 55!

Susan at Stony River said...

What a naughty sneeze ROFL

And YES I hate the teaser ones -- argh!

G-Man said...

Nope!
I thought he was gonna puke!
I like your ending way better..
Excellent 55 Hope...
Thanks for the chuckle!!
Thanks for playing also, and have a Kick Ass Week-End....G

Yvonne Osborne said...

Oh, you had me there for a minute!

It is very frustrating, that torturous tingling to nowhere.

Kay L. Davies said...

Am I the only one who saw that one coming?
Very well done, however!
-- K

Kay, Alberta, Canada
An Unfittie's Guide to Adventurous Travel

Bill ~ {The Old Fart} said...

I have Jim's problem myself. Last night I thought I was going to spew a lung. Then the coughs came. I will be glad when this bug is over.

WOnderful Flash 55 my friend.

Titus said...

Oh yes, we've all been there!